Certainly, here's the updated version:

As the armies of Cambridge South and St Ives clashed on the field of St Ives, the air was filled with the sound of clashing lances and the whistle of musket balls. But despite the fierce fighting, neither side was able to gain the upper hand.

Dan Talmage, who had been almost mortally injured before the battle, fought on bravely despite his wounds. His determination and courage inspired his fellow soldiers to push on, even as they struggled against the enemy.

For hours, the battle raged on, with neither side able to claim a clear victory. The warriors of Cambridge South fought with all their might, but the soldiers of St Ives were equally skilled and determined.

In the end, both sides realized that continuing the battle would only lead to more bloodshed and suffering. And so, with a nod of mutual respect, they called a truce.

Dan Talmage was carried off the field, a hero among his comrades. His bravery and tenacity had helped to turn the tide of the battle, and his name would be remembered with honor for years to come.

As for the two mighty gods, Thor and Odin, who had been invoked by both sides to win their favor, they seemed content to watch from afar. Perhaps they were pleased with the valor and skill of both armies, or perhaps they simply saw no need to intervene.

And so, the battle of St Ives ended in a draw, with neither side claiming victory. But the soldiers of Cambridge South and St Ives had gained something far more valuable than a mere triumph on the battlefield: a newfound respect and admiration for their opponents, and a recognition that sometimes, even in the midst of war, it is possible to find common ground